This is the second of two "expression" assignment mentor notes I am posting. This one is by Lauren Draghetti.
Lauren did a nice job capturing Emma's personality and trying to keep her as on-model as possible. I think keeping a character "On-model" is very important and, truthfully, a part of this assignment. You should always try and make the character looks like the modelsheet when given one by an employer, so this was good practice for Lauren to do just that. As far as how she captured the emotions, I thought she did a fine job, but there was room for improvement here and there. First, the "Surprised" expression she drew is hurt by it being a profile view. Yes, you see the mouth open very clearly in this angle, but she really doesn't get the most out of the expression- especially the eyes- from this view. With "surprised" you can either move her head forward or back, but it shouldn't be straight up and down to the body. It just doesn't say the emotion if she's not leaning in one direction or the other. Same with "scared", which more often than not you would cower back, not move forward toward whatever you are afraid of. Lauren's "sad" expression, as you can see, I changed very little since I thought it worked well. I mostly just dropped her shoulders and had her hair move forward from gravity. Doing that helps accent her mood too. Also, I really liked her "nervous" and only tweaked that slightly. I felt her body could be twisted away from us more and I liked the idea of her biting on her pinky to accent her nervousness. Pretty much all of Lauren's poses had the shoulders up, which for emotions like "happy", "sad", and "surprised" seemed like the opposite of what you would want to portray, so I dropped the shoulders on those emotions in my notes. Thanks for all of your effort Lauren, I hope these notes help you!